Tuesday, November 23, 2010

STORYTELLING TUESDAY: The Transformation

I thought I would try something new today and write a very short story in the hopes that it will hone my writing skills.  In actuality, I have no idea why I am doing this.  And the probability is that you will be snoozing by the end... But what the heck, here it goes!


The air was crisp and the ground was hard.  Fall had graciously began what winter needed to end.  The landscape had been ever so slightly kissed by the kindness of Jack Frost leaving a brilliant scene of crystal white shards among the foliage.  And when the moonlight hit it just right, the forest was transformed into a celebration of a thousand tiny twinkle lights.  I could feel my bare feet gliding across the cold, damp earth and I had a sensation of being here before.

My humble body felt a soothing vibration of unison and at last I had felt the connection to nature that I had so longingly desired.

I stood still in the silence of the night, no fear in my senses, no feeling of cold under my feet, just an understanding that I was one with my surroundings.

Low humming darted back and forth behind my head and I could feel myself slipping into a peaceful trance.  A million tiny sparks fluttered against my body gently caressing me.  I closed my eyes and surrendered to a power stronger than my own, and then I slumped to the ground.

I could smell and feel the dampness of the earth against my face, but I had no strength to pull myself up away from it, nor did I want too. I laid there in a semiconscious state for what seemed like an eternity.  My eyes were heavy and my limbs tingling, and without warning, a delectable searing pain straight from the centre of my back took my breath away. I arched in agony and threw back my head to scream, but no sound came from my lips.  And then in the hush of the night, I could feel something so undescribably beautiful growing softly from my body.  It was the tangible wings of my soul.

Graceful and delicate they glowed with the essence of my life, and I knew that my moment of transformation had begun. Whisked up and away into a tunnel of light, I swirled around and around ensconced in a magenta glow until my body burst forth from my radiant cocoon.

I had left my human form.

And as my eyes opened, I realized I was now one of the captivating lights and that my wings were humming in harmony with the others.

I had come home.  Finally.

Home to the land of the faeries.

Home to the land of my people.

9 comments:

  1. You need to do NaNoWriMo next year! You write beautifully.

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  2. That is stunning. I could see it all in my head. More please

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  3. I agree, very well written yet not too wordy. Just the right amount of mind pictures to make it seem like we're actually watching it rather than reading it. Good job Tracy, I always knew you were a faery good writer (sorry, couldn't help myself) :)

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  4. VERY beautifully written. I could picture everything in my mind and I could FEEL the sensations that you described so well. More please!

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  5. HEY! great writing!! love it...very vivid! more. more :)

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  6. beautifully written loved it
    :)L

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  7. Nice job! Loved the imagery and the "trance" like spell your writing put me under!

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  8. Beautiful writing Tracy! Happy Thanksgiving. Have a great holiday!

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  9. Excellent. I agree with Ms Caboo. You really need to do NaNoWriMo next year. You have a definite gift for writing.

    I'd love to hear more of that story!

    Martha

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